Sunday, May 4, 2008

Sense'd!

The eyes flitted across the room furtively
The lil one with 2 pigtails played peacefully.
The dolls were changed many times over,
The tiny pots and pans arranged all over.

The crowd began to disperse
towards the dining area:
Few held themselves back,
prepared to wait it over.

Thats when he entered
wearing a dark suit, class written all over.
He moved around with ease
evryone's attention he held to please.

It just took a second
but she saw the eyes squeezing shut
The pigtails flying around
Into the shadows far behind.

The instincts picked it up
ferocious and determined.
A mother's sixth sense they say
But she knew he was the one.

He was from the same family after all
No one would believe her, but she knew,
A mother will pounce to defend her brood,
Like a lion in wait, standing over his food.

The prompt over at writer's island 'ferocious'.

9 comments:

Keshi said...

**He was from the same family after all
No one would believe her, but she knew,
A mother will pounce to defend her brood,
Like a lion in wait, standing over his food.


ok I cried reading that! SO TOUCHING!


*HUGZ*

Keshi.

Suma said...

btw...your linked piece in writer's takes u back to teh island :D

Compassion Unlimitted said...

Very Very touching
TC
CU

Suma said...

i did comment here...i'm sure i did...
wah!!!

when i first saw the prompt ferocious, i first thought a mother protecting her brood...u brought it out well...

shubd said...

I completely agree that a mother is willing to put everything on the line for her offspring . Liked that bit about the 'sixth sense' . so true ..mothers CAN sense the danger so palpably .

Nice take on the prompt.

Mahi said...

that was thought provoking! beautifully written!

vEENs said...

u surprised me with that one!

totally!

very touching..and welll DIFFERENT!

beautiful take on the prompt girl! really!

anthonynorth said...

You've got a mother about right, regardless of species.

rebecca said...

very, very nicely done....this was very powerful.